So well done! I’ve always disliked when people say you need to break up dialogue or you can’t just tell a story in this manner, but it’s all there. I can even see him lean forward in his seat at the end. I can imagine the room where they’re talking, because what it looks like doesn’t matter. Great example of paring down and letting the words work.
Something about the burning amusement park immediately gave me the creeps and then the cosmic horror just took it to the next level. The interview was so real and the perfect way to tell the story. His fear and difficulty revisiting what happened was so palpable. Creepy AF and I absolutely loved it. Please, please turn this into a Talking Terror. Thinking about listening to it, complete with background music, gives me the shivers.
This one was actually based on a real event. When I was a kid, my family used to visit the Isle of Man every summer. In 1973, Summerland, which was one of the main attractions, burned down, killing 50 people. This would make a fun talking terrors, but I think I would need to get someone else to do another voice.
Oh wow, I had no idea. That’s so tragic and scary as well! This adds a whole ‘nother layer to the story. I really, really loved this one. Do whatever it takes to get it talking! It’s perfect for it!
The most disturbing element for me wasn’t the creature itself, but the idea of perception being invaded. The tentacles moving through the firefighters instead of attacking them shifts the horror from physical threat to psychological contamination.
Visually, that’s such a compelling concept — smoke as a membrane between realities rather than just atmosphere.
That final line makes it feel like the entity never left.
Love the use of dialogue alone to tell a story. Nice job, John!
Thank you.
This was absolutely fantastic. I felt so immersed in the visuals, which I think is tricky to do with dialogue. Really awesome work.
That’s a relief. Thank you.
Fantastic writing loved it
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how creative
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So well done! I’ve always disliked when people say you need to break up dialogue or you can’t just tell a story in this manner, but it’s all there. I can even see him lean forward in his seat at the end. I can imagine the room where they’re talking, because what it looks like doesn’t matter. Great example of paring down and letting the words work.
Thank you. It was a fun little exercise.
Something about the burning amusement park immediately gave me the creeps and then the cosmic horror just took it to the next level. The interview was so real and the perfect way to tell the story. His fear and difficulty revisiting what happened was so palpable. Creepy AF and I absolutely loved it. Please, please turn this into a Talking Terror. Thinking about listening to it, complete with background music, gives me the shivers.
This one was actually based on a real event. When I was a kid, my family used to visit the Isle of Man every summer. In 1973, Summerland, which was one of the main attractions, burned down, killing 50 people. This would make a fun talking terrors, but I think I would need to get someone else to do another voice.
Oh wow, I had no idea. That’s so tragic and scary as well! This adds a whole ‘nother layer to the story. I really, really loved this one. Do whatever it takes to get it talking! It’s perfect for it!
You did so much in such a limited scope. The descriptions were incredibly vivid and the character's unique voice shone through. Excellent work.
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This is brilliant🖤Love this John
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Damn, this was great. Hell of an intro to your work, sir. I look forward to more.
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Superb stuff. Wonderfully told just through dialogue. The imagery created is fantastic and it's one of those that really pulls you into it.
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John, you did such a great job with this one. It's SO difficult to do a dialogue-only story, and you pulled it off beautifully.
Thank you!!
Really excellent. Was hooked right away!
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Awesome job with the dialogue. Crazy how I could see the memories in my head through that alone. Got a chill with the languages line 🐙
Well done
A great exercise is show vs tell
Even though it was fine through dialogue
perfectly written!
The most disturbing element for me wasn’t the creature itself, but the idea of perception being invaded. The tentacles moving through the firefighters instead of attacking them shifts the horror from physical threat to psychological contamination.
Visually, that’s such a compelling concept — smoke as a membrane between realities rather than just atmosphere.
That final line makes it feel like the entity never left.