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Wannabe_Writer's avatar

This was hands down creepy. Good read

İsmail's avatar

The psychological dread is relentless throughout. I loved the way the shadow figures keep the line between medical reality and externalized guilt deliberately blurred, right up until that brutal reveal

The moment Paranoia forces the confession, leading into such an agonizing climax, lands with real force. And having the entities attach themselves to Ellen at the end gives the whole piece a beautifully bleak, cyclical finish

Stellar work.

Her Inner Shadow's avatar

Such an intriguing story!

Crosswind Chronicles's avatar

Man, the switch from seeing the shadows to hearing them after the surgery was such a good escalation. I thought I knew where this was going with the floaters diagnosis, then “You made us” completely changed the story. And passing everything on to Ellen at the end was nasty in the best possible way. Apparently getting rid of your inner demons just means forwarding them to somebody else. 😂 Great read, John!

Gary L Taylor's avatar

That was great. A real creepyness to it. I'm Not great with eye stuff myself bur thought that was very well done.

Becky Hayward's avatar

Oh damn!

Katharine English's avatar

Wow, chilling! ❤️

Cat Jensen's avatar

Thank you, I really enjoyed reading this. I don't know why, but anything to do with eyes gives me the creeps 😬

John Watson - Horror Author's avatar

Eye stuff freaks me out, too, which is probably why I am so drawn to the subject.

Wendy Cockcroft's avatar

Ohhh... creepy!

Bon C's avatar

Excellent

Chris Rodriguez's avatar

Left me guessing. Good read!