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Uncomfortably Dark Horror's avatar

This did not go as I thought it might…😄😄

John Watson - Horror Author's avatar

I hope that’s a good thing 😆

Uncomfortably Dark Horror's avatar

Always.

Matthew Holvey's avatar

It escalated quickly 😂

Uncomfortably Dark Horror's avatar

It did indeed…😀

Parker McCoy's avatar

Wow, the wee little man didn't have to get pissy about it. Great post, John.

Gregory Blair's avatar

Whoa! The gory/cosmic twist of "unbecoming" is as eyebrow-raising as it is clever!

Underdog Authors's avatar

Oh my goodness John, this was so original. I'm actually a bit shaken by that dark turn at the end. Despite the creepy photo, for a minute there I got excited that his issue was fixed. Did not expect a rainbow followed by organs!

Damon Blankenship's avatar

You write such vivid description. The pile of pavement pizza painted quite the picture in my mind.

When Mr. Jingles said stay golden, I totally thought he’d starting peeing gold coins. His own pot of gold at the end of his chunk filled rainbow 🌈 🍀

British Horror Authors Guild's avatar

That was magnificent, so much grunt so such a short story! And the artwork was gorgeous too! Where did you find it?

M.O.Stewart Writes Dark Stuff's avatar

Oh gosh wasn’t expecting that ending and it made my skin crawl

Dorie Snow-Welch/ 雪多丽's avatar

Probably the first time I ever thought to myself “thank goodness I don’t have a penis.” 🫣

Deborah Dobbs's avatar

Didn't see that twist coming. Holy smokes. That didn't disappoint!

Nicholas Samuel Stember's avatar

Certainly not the ending I was expecting, but it was a very enjoyable (if messy) read :D

Matthew Holvey's avatar

It was the chunks that got me

John Watson - Horror Author's avatar

They’ll always get you.