This narrative is chilling and keeps you on the edge of your seat. The diner scene is particularly haunting, and the twist at the end is unexpected and thrilling. Great job!👏
I have seen way too many horror movies to accept your set up. But wait. You diverted expectations. Thank you. Diners always creep me out. I even wrote about one. You almost went where I went. So I thank you again for really doing something I did not expect or thought of.
I really felt that sense of relief when Jonas first saw the diner sign through the fog. We have all had that feeling of being lost and finding a bright spot on the road. The way you turned that comfort into something scary with the breathing mountain was a great touch. It made for a very creepy Saturday read.
This might be my favorite yet! The sudden shift from cozy to cosmic horror was jarring in the very best way. You know you're in trouble when the crowd starts hailing 🖤.
Oooh this is very eerie. You definitely get the cold creeping dread feelings. The slow reveal worked so well, from mundane worries to terror. The unsettling details were so subtle yet they also stood out.
That slow shift from cozy diner to full cosmic dread was well paced. The pie almost made me forget I was reading horror. Almost 😅
The pie lures you in
This is why we don't like driving in the fog..
That escalated soo quickly. Chills down my spine.
Thank you
This narrative is chilling and keeps you on the edge of your seat. The diner scene is particularly haunting, and the twist at the end is unexpected and thrilling. Great job!👏
Thank you
I have seen way too many horror movies to accept your set up. But wait. You diverted expectations. Thank you. Diners always creep me out. I even wrote about one. You almost went where I went. So I thank you again for really doing something I did not expect or thought of.
Thank you
Nice and creepy, I really liked it!
Thank you
I really felt that sense of relief when Jonas first saw the diner sign through the fog. We have all had that feeling of being lost and finding a bright spot on the road. The way you turned that comfort into something scary with the breathing mountain was a great touch. It made for a very creepy Saturday read.
Cheers
Oh, and love the GIF. Makes it stand out.
Love me some cosmic horror! This was a blast!
Thank you.
As someone who loves to create horror out of the land-- the imagery of the mountain "breathing" tickled my fancy.
I’ve had this story in my head for ages, although it was initially a troll on the Trollstigen road.
This might be my favorite yet! The sudden shift from cozy to cosmic horror was jarring in the very best way. You know you're in trouble when the crowd starts hailing 🖤.
The masses must obey.
Awesome twist! The pacing is great and left me wanting more!
Thank you.
Oooh this is very eerie. You definitely get the cold creeping dread feelings. The slow reveal worked so well, from mundane worries to terror. The unsettling details were so subtle yet they also stood out.
Thank you
It’s never good when they want to fatten you up.
This is why I am dieting
That's a good flash fiction. I enjoyed it, thanks.
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Very cool story!
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