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Crosswind Chronicles's avatar

Honestly, I love that you mentioned this came from just forcing yourself to write and seeing what surfaced, because it gives the whole piece this raw dreamlike momentum that really works.

“The building is in decay, falling apart from the inside out, like a rotting tooth” is such a nasty good image. And the ending flipping the perspective into something darker than the sisters themselves was a really cool turn.

John Watson - Horror Author's avatar

Thank you. I love free writing, as something cool tends to come out when I don’t overthink it.

Crosswind Chronicles's avatar

Absolutely!

Alexander Marlow's avatar

Thanks. I feel stronger too

Wendy Cockcroft's avatar

Nice twist at the end. Great job, John.

Arkenwell's avatar

Excellent! Short and to the point.

Alicia's avatar

Even your stream of consciousness is good. Damn.

Stephen ravenfeller's avatar

I felt the victim became the hunter. Absorbed? Perhaps like a Wraith?

John Watson - Horror Author's avatar

I honestly don’t know what the nightmare man is. I wrote this with very little thought and went where the words took me.

Wendy's avatar

It's kind of ominous. I like it.